Wednesday 5 January 2011

'At the Bar' by William McIlvanney

'At the Bar' by William McIlvanney

Key questions you will be looking to answer are about:

1) Climax
2) Turning point
3) Moment of realisation
4)Surprise ending

Remember the big man has two moments of realisation; first when he realises the denim man has drunk his pint.  He decides to ignore this and buy the denim man a pint.  The second realisation comes when the denim man continues to be cheeky and the big man realises he will have to be violent to regain his pride.

The moment of climax is when the big man punches the denim man.  This is the surprise at the end of the story!

You should have a copy of this short story (If you don't you will need to get one from me before the prelim)

If you are studying Intermediate 2 you will need to answer two essay questions (Likely one on short story and one on poetry).
If you are studying Intermediate 1 you will only have to answer one essay question on one text.

It is therefore important that you know your short story as well as your poems.

Below I have simply listed key qoutations from the short story which you will have in your jotters but may have missed/mislayed. 

I have used the page numbers from the handout we used in class.

Page 73- 76





'At the Bar' by William McIlvanney notes and quotes:

At the start of the short story the atmosphere is quiet and dull:

Line one:  "The pub was quiet."

This set the atmosphere early on.  The poet uses sentence structure to emphasise how quiet and dull the bar is. The kind of sentence he uses is a short sentence.  This grabs our attention and lets this important piece of information sink in straight away.

The big man appears to have recently come out of prison because of his outdated and overlarge clothes:

Line 3: "The suit was slightly out of fashion yet looked quite new and it was too big for him."

The Big man seems to fit in with the quiet and placid environment as he seems quiet and innocent:

Line 11"He looked along the gantry with a bemused innocence, like a small boy in a sweet shop"

Here the poet uses a sinile to compare the big man to a small innocent child in a sweet shop.

Just as a small child would be happy and excited with the choice of sweets on offer in a sweet shop so the big man is in awe at the amount of drinks he has to choose from.  This simile makes him seem quiet and makes the moment when he flips out more surprising.

The poet uses a great metaphor to describe the skin tone of the big man:

"His pallor suggested a plant kept out of the light."

"Pallor" is the colour and look of his skin.  Here the poet compares the big man's unhealthy pale skin to a plant that has been kept of of the light. This is a good metaphor to use as a plant kept out of the light would be yellow and unhealthy looking.  The man may look yellow and unhealthy as he has spent so much time locked up away from the outdoors.

All of these techniques used to describe the big man are examples of 'Characterisation'.  This is a good word to use when discussing how the poet has created a quiet and well behaved character.

Then the denim man enters and tries to get people to look at him so that he can accuse them of something and start a fight.  The characterisation of the big man is very different.

Line 15 "Nasty hard"
Line 16 "Fidgety drinker"
Line 19 "He kept glancing along at the big man and seemed annoyed no reaction."
Line 20 "His eyes were a demonstration loking for a place to happen."

This makes the reader dislike this unpredictable and violent character.  The big man seems to ignore him which winds the denim man up even more.

The atmosphere of the bar is still very quiet, calm and placid. 

Line 28:  "The barman was relieved to see Old Dave come towards the bar as if he was walking across America"

This is a good simile to show how slowly the pace of life is in the bar. It compares the amount of time Old Dave takes to reach the bar with the amount of time it would take to walk across America.

When the denim man does not get a reaction out of the big man he drinks his pint to cause tension.
 
The moment of realisation and the climax.

The big man remains calm and polite when he finds his pint is gone:

"Excuse me.  Ah had a pint there"

This shows the big man's quiet manner in the short sentences and polite word choice.  He does not blame the denim man or anyone else and he is not looking for trouble.  This shows that he is not thinking of violence before his moment of realisation.  However when the denim man owns up to it in a very sarcastic way the atmosphere changes from dull to electrically charged.

"The moment crackled like an electrical storm"

This is the moment the big man realises what has happened and turns from being quiet and polite to angry.  This simile shows the friction and possibility as the big man has to think about how to react.  The situation is made even more tense when the denim man challenges and provokes him further.  The poet then uses a great image that would be prefectly at home in a western film:

"The silence prolonged itself like an empty street with a man at either end of it."

This shows the tense atmospher between the two men and how the big man feels this tension also as he is silent while deciding what he should do.  The reader realises there may be violence as the connotations (what the words or images make us think of) suggest two cowboys across a deserted street with some locals about to watch a gun fight where one dies and one is victorious.  The big man continues to rise above the situation and appears to make his decision to defuse the situation.

"The big man stared and lowered his eyes, looked up and smiled.  It wasn't convincing.  Nonchalant surrender never is."

The big man tries to be pleasant and take it as a joke although the reader feels that he does not truy feel this.  He continues to joke when he offers to buy the denim man a drink:

"Get the man a pint of heavy"

This seems to be the end of the moment of realisation where he decides that violence is not worth it and he seeks to avoid conflict.  However, that changes when the denim man keeps pushing.  He has already been very cheeky to the big man:

"Ye had a pint there but I drank it.  That's the dinky dory"

When the denim man continues to be cheeky the big man has a second moment of realisation and realises he has to do something to get the denim man back.

The denim man continues to wind the big man up by saying:"Your good health.  You obviously value it."

He is deliberatly trying to make a fool of the big man and is assuming the role of the victorious person.  He makes remarks like this which make the big man look like a coward.  This statement and his wink to the bar man end the big mans second moment of realisation as he realises that he needs to do something to regain his pride. 

He realises now that he must teach the denim man a lesson in a language he will understand (violence). 

The climax scene

The climax of the stroy is when the big man punches the denim man. 

The poet's explosive language and imagery of the climax scene show the outcome of the big man's second moment of realisation for both characters.  The big man suddenly attacks the denim man:

"...big man's clenched right fist had hit the base of the glass like a demolition ball"

This simile compares the big man's fist with a demolition ball and shows the reader the force at which the fist hits the glass.  The notion of sudden violence is clear. 

"Splintered scream among the shards of volleying glass and exploding beer..."

The verbs volleying and exploding show the force of the scene and the alliteration (repetition of 's' and 'sh') makes the glass seem all the sharper.  The reader realises the outcome of the short story has suddenly changed and we have an unexpected ending.  The big man has now come out as the clear winner.  The most impressive thing is that the big man switches back to self contro and restraint:

"The name's Rafferty.  Cherio.  Nice shop you run."

He is willing to take control and responsibility for his own actions and leaves his name in case the denim man pursues him.  The reaction of the bar man lets us know that the big man did the right thing and left victorious:

"'You're barred', he said"

Essay questions for 'At the Bar'

1)  Choose a novel or short story in which there is an obvious turning point or climax.

Show how the writer leads up to this turning point or climax, and say what its significance is for the overall story. 

In your answer you must refer to the text and two at least two of the following:  Structure, plot, key incident(s), or any other appropriate feature.

2)  Choose a novel or short story in which one of the main characters has to struggle with difficulties in order to reach a satisfactory outcome.

Outline the difficulties which face the character you have chosen and show how her or his strengths and weaknesses affect the course of the story and how a satisfactory ending is reached. 


In your answer you must refer to the text and two at least two of the following:  Characterisation, plot, climax, dialogue, or any other appropriate feature.

12 comments:

  1. Hello, I hope you'll excuse this rather shameless attempt at self publicity but here is a short film that I made of this story.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qoVCw0HIjHg

    I hope you like it.

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    1. Brilliant, nicely done. I will use the video for the members of the class who are visual learners. Thanks, Mr Crawford

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    2. I'm sorry for the late reply; I didn't realise you had responded. Thank you very much. I hope it helps your students.

      John

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  2. yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet

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  3. Exam on monday yar whats this gonnna do

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  4. Robbie: “Are you, uh, a real villain?”
    Bobbie: “Well, uh, technically... nah.”
    Robbie: “Have you ever caught a good guy, like, uh, like a real superhero?”
    Bobbie: “Nah.”
    Robbie: “Have you ever tried a disguise?”
    Bobbie: “Nah, nah...”
    Robbie: “Alright! I can see that I will have to teach you how to be villains!”

    [Hook]
    Hey!
    We are Number One
    Hey!
    We are Number One

    [Verse 1]
    Now listen closely
    Here's a little lesson in trickery
    This is going down in history
    If you wanna be a Villain Number One
    You have to chase a superhero on the run
    Just follow my moves, and sneak around
    Be careful not to make a sound
    (Shh)
    (No, don't touch that!)

    [Hook]
    We are Number One
    Hey!
    We are Number One
    We are Number One

    [Verse 2]
    Ha ha ha
    Now look at this net, that I just found
    When I say go, be ready to throw
    Go!
    (Throw it on him, not me!)
    (Ugh, let's try something else)
    Now watch and learn, here's the deal
    He'll slip and slide on this banana peel!
    (Ha ha ha, gasp! what are you doing!?)

    [Outro]
    Ba-ba-biddly-ba-ba-ba-ba, ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba
    We are Number One
    Hey!
    Ba-ba-biddly-ba-ba-ba-ba, ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba
    We are Number One
    Ba-ba-biddly-ba-ba-ba-ba, ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba
    We are Number One
    Hey!
    Ba-ba-biddly-ba-ba-ba-ba, ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba-ba
    We are Number One
    Hey!
    Hey!

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  5. Somebody once told me the world is gonna roll me
    I ain't the sharpest tool in the shed
    She was looking kind of dumb with her finger and her thumb
    In the shape of an "L" on her forehead
    Well the years start coming and they don't stop coming
    Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running
    Didn't make sense not to live for fun
    Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb
    So much to do, so much to see
    So what's wrong with taking the back streets?
    You'll never know if you don't go
    You'll never shine if you don't glow
    Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
    Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid
    And all that glitters is gold
    Only shooting stars break the mold
    It's a cool place and they say it gets colder
    You're bundled up now, wait till you get older
    But the meteor men beg to differ
    Judging by the hole in the satellite picture
    The ice we skate is getting pretty thin
    The water's getting warm so you might as well swim
    My world's on fire, how about yours?
    That's the way I like it and I never get bored
    Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
    Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid
    All that glitters is gold
    Only shooting stars break the mold
    Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
    Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show, on get paid
    And all that glitters is gold
    Only shooting stars
    Somebody once asked could I spare some change for gas?
    I need to get myself away from this place
    I said yep what a concept
    I could use a little fuel myself
    And we could all use a little change
    Well, the years start coming and they don't stop coming
    Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running
    Didn't make sense not to live for fun
    Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb
    So much to do, so much to see
    So what's wrong with taking the back streets?
    You'll never know if you don't go (go!)
    You'll never shine if you don't glow
    Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
    Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid
    And all that glitters is gold
    Only shooting stars break the mold
    And all that glitters is gold
    Only shooting stars break the mold

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  6. Ay
    Fonsi
    DY
    Oh
    Oh no, oh no
    Oh yeah
    Diridiri, dirididi Daddy
    Go
    Sí, sabes que ya llevo un rato mirándote
    Tengo que bailar contigo hoy (DY)
    Vi que tu mirada ya estaba llamándome
    Muéstrame el camino que yo voy (Oh)
    Tú, tú eres el imán y yo soy el metal
    Me voy acercando y voy armando el plan
    Solo con pensarlo se acelera el pulso (Oh yeah)
    Ya, ya me está gustando más de lo normal
    Todos mis sentidos van pidiendo más
    Esto hay que tomarlo sin ningún apuro
    Despacito
    Quiero respirar tu cuello despacito
    Deja que te diga cosas al oído
    Para que te acuerdes si no estás conmigo
    Despacito
    Quiero desnudarte a besos despacito
    Firmo en las paredes de tu laberinto
    Y hacer de tu cuerpo todo un manuscrito (sube, sube, sube)
    (Sube, sube)
    Quiero ver bailar tu pelo
    Quiero ser tu ritmo
    Que le enseñes a mi boca
    Tus lugares favoritos (favoritos, favoritos baby)
    Déjame sobrepasar tus zonas de peligro
    Hasta provocar tus gritos
    Y que olvides tu apellido (Diridiri, dirididi Daddy)
    Si te pido un beso ven dámelo
    Yo sé que estás pensándolo
    Llevo tiempo intentándolo
    Mami, esto es dando y dándolo
    Sabes que tu corazón conmigo te hace bom, bom
    Sabes que esa beba está buscando de mi bom, bom
    Ven prueba de mi boca para ver cómo te sabe
    Quiero, quiero, quiero ver cuánto amor a ti te cabe
    Yo no tengo prisa, yo me quiero dar el viaje
    Empecemos lento, después salvaje
    Pasito a pasito, suave suavecito
    Nos vamos pegando poquito a poquito
    Cuando tú me besas con esa destreza
    Veo que eres malicia con delicadeza
    Pasito a pasito, suave suavecito
    Nos vamos pegando, poquito a poquito
    Y es que esa belleza es un rompecabezas
    Pero pa montarlo aquí tengo la pieza
    Despacito
    Quiero respirar tu cuello despacito
    Deja que te diga cosas al oído
    Para que te acuerdes si no estás conmigo
    Despacito
    Quiero desnudarte a besos despacito
    Firmo en las paredes de tu laberinto
    Y hacer de tu cuerpo todo un manuscrito (sube, sube, sube)
    (Sube, sube)
    Quiero ver bailar tu pelo
    Quiero ser tu ritmo
    Que le enseñes a mi boca
    Tus lugares favoritos (favoritos, favoritos baby)
    Déjame sobrepasar tus zonas de peligro
    Hasta provocar tus gritos
    Y que olvides tu apellido
    Despacito
    Vamos a hacerlo en una playa en Puerto Rico
    Hasta que las olas griten "¡ay, bendito!"
    Para que mi sello se quede contigo
    Pasito a pasito, suave suavecito
    Nos vamos pegando, poquito a poquito
    Que le enseñes a mi boca
    Tus lugares favoritos (favoritos, favoritos baby)
    Pasito a pasito, suave suavecito
    Nos vamos pegando, poquito a poquito
    Hasta provocar tus gritos
    Y que olvides tu apellido (DY)
    Despacito

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  7. [Verse 1]
    Uh, open up the potions, pop
    It's my mine come on, mine it up
    Hear a hiss near the door and the night begins
    Creepers done this before, I never let 'em in
    Pack up your inventory, 'n' we can go out
    Bring some extra food so that you don't starve
    Sometimes you forget torches
    And you gotta bring your pickaxe
    Yeah, you know where we goin'
    Sometimes you forget torches

    [Chorus]
    Welcome to my mine, we are mining diamonds
    We ain't gotta strip mine
    We don't have to fight mobs
    Welcome to my mine
    Play that noteblock nicely
    Show me all those emeralds
    We don't gotta dodge lava

    Welcome to my mine
    Welcome to my mine

    [Verse 2]
    When it comes and you know that you wanna stay
    Block dirt, let's start mining those real things
    Keep those swords in our hands, and open up those potions
    Let's fight those mobs, come on slash away
    Sometimes you forget torches
    And you gotta bring a pickaxe
    Yeah, we know where we going
    Sometimes you forget torches

    [Chorus]
    Welcome to my mine, we are mining diamonds
    We don't gotta strip mine, we don't have to fight mobs
    Welcome to my mine,play that noteblock nicely
    Show me all those emeralds,we don't gotta dodge lava... (pause)
    Welcome to my mine, welcome to my...

    [Verse 3]
    Welcome to my strip mine, the mine, the cave, the crack
    My mine is your mine, treating it right
    Sorry if my mine don't have the gold
    As soon as I dig down I will find more of that
    Oh, my goodness, what is that?
    Azul brillante, guapo, so we're going to mine that
    I think I know what that is
    O.M.G it's diamonds!

    [Chorus]
    Welcome to my mine, we will mine diamonds
    We don't gotta strip mine
    We don't gotta fight mobs
    Welcome to my mine, play that noteblock nicely
    Show me all those emeralds
    We don't gotta dodge lava
    Welcome to my mine, welcome to my mine, welcome to my mine

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  8. Wew ya this is for all the lasses
    All the gangsta girls
    Just remember Buzzcocks loves ya

    All the lasses in the world I think your pure cush
    Even if your rough as fuck I still think you are lush
    Wallsend, Byker, Whitley bay all the fanny is pure classy
    I'll take you back to my house and fucking smash ya pastie

    I met this lass from Whitley bay
    I took her to my house coz she wanted to play
    She was like wew your pure radge
    I was like ya let is see ya vadge
    Cookson telt is you always buck back
    But he said you didn't like it when he made you neck his wack
    Gangsta gangsta I'm a pure lover
    I winnit fuck ya round coz I think I kna ya motha
    She used to be a dinner nanny at the high school
    I think I might have poked her so thats canny cool
    She said wew thats pure cush
    You can come back to mine coz ya propa lush

    Well I didn't stop rucking till the break of dawn and I taped the fucking lot on me mobile phone
    She was like wew divnt show ya marras
    I was like course I won't man, haha

    All the lasses in the world I think your pure cush
    Even if your rough as fuck I still think you are lush
    Wallsend, Byker, Whitley bay all the fanny is pure classy
    I'll take you back to my house and fucking smash ya pastie

    Wew ya I met a lass from Walker gate she had a top notch fanny there was no debate
    She had ne front teeth but she was belta
    I took her for a date at me local bus shelter
    I left her slurps on me speckra gold
    After afew minutes her legs started to unfold
    She ripped off her knickers like Hulk Hogan
    I was like wew your pure smoking

    Av never met a lass like her before who loved getting rucked on a bus stop floor
    She said I'm not the first and I won't be the last
    So I thought wew fuck it a think al have a blast
    So Im half way through when she starts ganning crackers
    Shouting out stuff like Im guna eat ya knackers
    She wanted me bairns but I thought fuck that
    So I pulled out me knob and blarted on her back

    All the lasses in the world I think your pure cush
    Even if your rough as fuck I still think you are lush
    Wallsend, Byker, Whitley bay all the fanny is pure classy
    I'll take you back to my house and fucking smash ya pastie

    Howay then lasses lets see yas all up on the dance floor
    Flash ya gear for the lads
    Aye am talking to you owa there in the corner
    And yee an all
    You're good looking, you're good looking, you're good looking, but yee owa there
    You're ugly but I'd still ride ya haha

    All the lasses in the world I think your pure cush
    Even if your rough as fuck I still think you are lush
    Wallsend, Byker, Whitley bay all the fanny is pure classy
    I'll take you back to my house and fucking smash ya pastie

    All the lasses in the world I think your pure cush
    Even if your rough as fuck I still think you are lush
    Wallsend, Byker, Whitley bay all the fanny is pure classy
    I'll take you back to my house and fucking smash ya pastie


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  9. Wew here this is for all the gangstas
    All the people who understand I'm class
    The Mafia, the Gangstas, the Trippaz, the Longstens anyone ye kna what I mean
    Here we gan
    (Ooh-ooh!)


    [Verse 1]
    When I was a little blub of spunk just coming oot me favva
    I heard my uncle talking to me motha and me nana
    Talking 'bout how they thought I'd be a poof
    But when I came out, I called it pure bluff
    By the age of two, I had my own crew
    To be a rayka gangsta was all I fucking knew
    Knockin r'und the doors, collecting people's scrap
    Savin up me money for me first ounce of tac
    I didn't use a bucket, didn't use a pipe
    Smoked the fucking lot through me BMX bike
    Handlebars, tin foil, a placker bag
    Me first bit of smoke made us spark oot me dad

    [Chorus]
    I'm a gangsta and I love to ruck
    (All the gangstas in the UK look up to me)
    The tac I sell is pure strict as fuck
    (Here, it'll mek ya gan white off one blow)
    All the lasses think I'm propa lush
    (Ah, here, Buzzcocks, yar balls are propa massive)
    All the gangstas think I'm pure kush
    (Here, man, I'm a GANGSTA man!)

    [Verse 2]
    By the age of 14, I got me first ride
    In me nana's garden on me little cousin's slide
    She was 25 but she didn't look old
    For me first fuck, she was pure solid gold
    She made us walk her home, and she wouldn't let us loose
    So I went back r'und with Trekka, and egged her fuckin' hoose
    Ructions got started, her fella got mad
    So he came round and started on me dad
    What a little dafty, fucking runnin to mine
    Got oot me bread knife and sliced him! (It's slice time!)

    [Chorus]
    I'm a gangsta and I love to ruck
    (Here, I've had a fight with four Staffordshires, man!)
    The tac I sell is pure strict as fuck
    (Hohoho, you're on a white-y!)
    All the lasses think I'm propa lush
    (Oh, here, Buzzcocks, suck me tits, man
    Alreet!)
    All the gangstas think I'm pure kush
    (Whew, here, Gangsta Gangsta, look at me!)

    [Bridge]
    I've got a little pal who looks up to me
    I taught him how to box from the age of three
    So divvint fuck with him, 'cause he doesn't fuck aboot
    Me best pal Trekka, he'll only knock ya oot

    [Verse 3, Trekka]
    Riding on my crossa doon Holycross hill
    More lethal than a spakka with a bag of pills
    Coppers still chasing coz I pinched a bag of crisps
    I think I'm ganning faster coz I'm fucking off me tits
    Datsun's, Mario's, Mitzie's and a Rocky
    A full bag of mushrooms and a line of fucking coffee
    Nothing suits me better than a fight with a staffy
    I knocked out a copper's dog coz I put it on a laffy

    [Chorus]
    I'm a gangsta and I love to ruck
    (Whew, here, man, I knocked out my tutor at Sixth Form)
    The tac I sell is pure strict as fuck
    (Here, man, my tac'll bash your face in)
    All the lasses think I'm propa lush
    (Are ye alreet, pet? Let us poke ya. NOO.)
    All the gangstas think I'm pure kush
    (Here, gangstas, hellow, it's me again)

    [Spoken]
    Reet, I'm gonna say all the gangstas I look up to right now on this fucking song so you understand where I'm coming from
    I look up to the Judgement Day cunt, Smurf, local MC Donald, the Regionsi Dandy, gaffas, low blackies and ALL the Jukebox Mafia
    Adele, Carly, Skeleton Girl and Stu, you're Newcastle's most lethal shoplifting crew
    Reet, noo that I've taad you aboot all the fucking gangstas, I'm gonna leave you with this:
    I smoke tac
    I hit people
    I don't care if people come to me, man
    Here, man, you're a little gangsta, I gan aye, I kna, and I'm pure proud to be a gangsta
    I wanna be a gangsta for the rest of me life, man
    I need to be a gangsta
    I live to rob old people and smoke fucking drugs

    (Here, mister, how much's this microphone worth? Is it alreet if I just take it outside to show me cousin?)

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